Friday, 30 October 2009

sustainability...

A sudden cry in silence,
a heart beats from that moment.
Wondering,
how long will it last in the future?
How hard will it beat against the external pressure?

Contracting and relaxing are everything,
everything of muscular working.
Questioning,
how long will it work in the future?
How hard will it work against the air particles?

Expression on the face is something,
something that reflects our feelings.
The darkness of the world steals the happiness,
the garish flowers numbs the consciousness.

For everything, there is a season,
and a time for all the matter under heaven.
A time to kill and a time to heal,
a time for war and a time for peace.

On the way of your life,
all the troubles' coming by.
They are cruel and even fierce,
try to make your show your tears.

Falling down? Never mind.
Stand up straight and don't be shy.
Give thanks to the grass and the sky,
cus they are caring and kind.

The sun's rising, the cock's crowing,
all the things keep on working.
Clear the dust on your body,
make a step and keep on walking.

Mates are always standing by,
be the booster in your life,
help you go through all the tides,
to see you soaring on the sky.

Life is hard,life is tough,
may God bless you all the path.
Friends can be a catalyst,
as a wellspring of sustainability.

(please suggest me a title for the poem...for my poetry competition.)Thanks...

8 comments:

Niel said...

Abit too lengthy. And the title sustainability?

kaemin said...

jia you ! bt u better modify it be4 sending it for competition ...

Hua Sheng said...

not bad not bad...xD

no NAMe said...

geng!!! ^^...+ u

Ng said...
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JerryNg said...

thx.
but what i need is suggestion and correction now.
suggest a title other than sustainability.
correct my sentences if there are some mistakes.
thank you.

Somebody said...

Your poem is on good direction...always about falling but standing up again with strength given by God.
I'm not a poet, so I do not dare to give any suggestion.
However, since you asked, I simply suggest the title,
"He sustains".
Actually you gt a gud title already, but hope you consider this also.

JerryNg said...

ok..anyway,tq.^^